Wrote a piano piece. Looking for constructive feedback....................

Started by OscoBosco, October 01, 2018, 02:37:43 PM

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October 02, 2018, 04:04:57 AM
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October 02, 2018, 04:21:44 AM
Quote from: OscoBosco on October 01, 2018, 02:37:43 PM
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=HpZqgxf_d1E

Just from a musical standpoint, I think your technique is fluent. The music is pleasing to the ear, and the different shifts through the keys, creating moods and melodies are well structured and straightforward. With other words, I like what I hear, and it shows promise. You keep going in the same vein, and the promise will deliver.
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October 02, 2018, 06:08:37 AM
Nicely done.  I liked at 1:50 when you switched up the register as the mid register was starting to get tiring.  Fine playing and technique.  One thing I heard quite a bit of was cascading accompaniment + melody line which gave it a sort of pop feel.  Rather than inner moving lines or more use of counterpoint.  For example, here is a nice "cascading accompaniment" work with a melody on top but notice the bass note is a counter melody in contrary motion: https://youtu.be/C_lOOYSzoBc?t=2700 (Rachmaninoff's 2nd Sonata).  It could also use more range in tempo.  Again, reference in the Rachmaninoff how new tempos are approached as part of the melodic contours.  Beautiful work and congratulations.
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